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a shock, a shudder,
a soft pleading cry. fade to black-no,
white-with the upward motion
of an infinitely propelled elevator.

*bing*

"come in, welcome. welcome, come in, yes."
a crowd has gathered. some weep,
some whisper, others raise their
hands and voices: another wall street in panic.

a circle of the less anxious assembles
off to the side, chatting, recalling.
your life was supposed to flash before your eyes,
but it hadn't been that at all for sal--
only an enormous question mark pressing down
to usher out his soul; for mr. rogers, a
sweater or trolley car, no doubt.

and all the while, saint peter, with
a lock combo scrawled on his
hand, wonders if he should have
let in that person who cut in line.
©2004-2010 ~zerofixity
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:iconrikania:
beautiful. i love the last part
:iconjesstasy18247:
this ROCKS. i agree, i love the last stanza. such a great idea. :hug:
:icontheunwarymariner:
man, you have some theology going here and i love it.some of my favorite poetry is that dealing with theological matters and you've done that very well, in the style of c.s lewis or w.h auden. very nive work. i could be way off here, but this is how i view it.
:iconmoragirl:
Love the rhythm in the first part and I'm yet another who thinks the ending is very cool, very clever. I like poems that end with questions, because so little is certain that firm endings can seem false, forced.

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